Academic Acknowledgements: Western vs. African Styles

Sunday evening caught me thinking about the differences in the ways that Westerners and African articulate their thoughts a la the cultural polarity  and the attendant  writing styles that exists between both races. Here below is a typical example.

Caveat: all names and scenarios are fictitious, please.

EUROPEAN VERSION:

I’d love to thank the entire academic staff of the department for helping out in the research, collation and typing the initial draft of the manuscript of this thesis.

Dr. Boyle, thanks for the useful inputs which turned out to be a life-saver. Prof. Richardson, under whose tutelage I honed my skills in technical writing, cannot be forgotten in a hurry.

To my wife and children who bore the long absence from home with such amazing understanding, thanks. The honor belongs to us all.

Simple and straightforward abi?

AFRICAN VERSION

I first of all want to thank the Almighty God, the omnipresent, the Omniscient, the Omnipotent, the Alpha & Omega (beginning and the end), the I am that I am, everlasting Father, king of glory, Jehovah Elohim, Jehovah Shamah, master of the universe, the lifter of my head, my shield when the enemy came in like a flood. All the glory belongs to You. Thank You for giving me the grace, strength and opportunity for writing and defending this project. Hallelujah!!!

Also to my parents, High Chief (Dr.) Joshua Ilamoye Arileyanka Agbabiake, the Maiyegun 1 of Isónu kingdom and my mother, Madam Julianah Asiyanbi Agbabiaka (Iya Elelubo) for sending me to school and standing by me towards the completion of my university degree. Even though my step mother, Madam Abike (Iya Onigaari)  vowed that it would be over her dead body that I will graduate before those her unserious children, my mother fought the battle. She attended several church vigils and Ile elewe-omo to ensure the I didn’t fail. Here I am today, a graduate!! Oju ti ti’won!! E se maami.

I also want to mention our reveren (Reverend), Canon D. S. Osanyinmoyela for his constant words of motivation over my education. Thank you sir, Oluwa a ma s’agbara d’otun o. To my uncles and aunts in Lagos and Osogbo, thank you for always sending me your used cloths; I used those wears to rock campus ehn! But uncle Semiu, the blue jeans you sent me last January had condom inside the pocket o. E j'awo sina sise o.

My project supervisor, Dr. Gerige Dada, thank you for your wonderful supervision, your gentle and accommodating personality really made the writing of this project easy. Though I still don’t understand why you gave me C in your course. Thanks all the same.

To my classmates, Ojo (Agungiobi), Ganiyu (epo akara), Bosco (Omo aiye), Femi (Osilo) Mumuni (Gbojunbe!), Bayowa (fine boi) and my sweetheart, Iyabo kenkelewu; thank you all the shiny memories of campus. Iyabo, I love 4 eva!

#JustThinking 

You must have known his life history by now. However, both writing styles in my opinion are correct because they only reflect the societal values of both writers. Or what do you think?